ext_4929 ([identity profile] redshoeson.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] cmk418 2008-04-28 01:50 pm (UTC)

I really like this! You've got Lois nailed, particularly during her exchange with Alby. I especially liked this bit:

Lois sat across from him, pursing her lips, crossing her arms in front of her, not saying a word. It was a tactic that’d worked on stronger men than Albert Grant.

Nicely done all 'round!

ETA: Here via [livejournal.com profile] _big_love

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